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  • Aqua LetiferA Offline
    Aqua LetiferA Offline
    Aqua Letifer
    wrote on last edited by
    #53

    It's World Poetry Day, so here you go.

    I wrote this about 11 years ago, give or take.

    (For those interested, instead of iambic pentameter or some other form we borrowed from the Greeks, this was written in fornyrðislag, a pretty common alliterative verse form in medieval Iceland and Anglo-Saxon areas. It's good for long narratives.)

    Contemplate carefully your curious eyes:
    Your world-windows and wondrous informers
    For our forebears, foregone by eras,
    Scores of secrets their sight could tell:
    Where to find water, when the stars
    Brought beasts beyond the plains,
    The time of tides.

    This talent evolved
    As with our ancestors, answering questions
    Broader, more bold; we're able by sight
    To compare, discover, equate and to judge.
    We discern by sight—we see and believe.

    Are we bounded by the blessings of broader sight?
    We've clever inventions, devices to cast
    Ourselves into stars, inside each atom;
    We've mapped the material, mastered its puzzles.
    But still we sit through each second's passing:
    Powerless against perpetual Present, we remain
    Interned by time.

    We've turned in the past
    To soothsayers and sages to scry our fortunes,
    With vague visions and evasive hereafters
    Granting but glimpses of the games Fates played,
    Their schemes still concealed.

    Now consider our Future:
    Devoid of diviners, prevailing by reason,
    We swap sages for science, trade
    Mysticism for method. Must our vision
    Still be restricted, stuck in the Now?
    Can our complex, accomplished technology
    Award us the wisdom once reserved
    For Fates and far-seers? What fears await us
    When science assumes Second Sight?

    Please love yourself.

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    • JollyJ Offline
      JollyJ Offline
      Jolly
      wrote on last edited by
      #54

      An original 5-minute doggerel knock together...

      In an obscure corner of the net
      Resided the battling bastards
      Screeching, arguing, but yet
      Sometimes they quit flinging words

      Strangely, they really did care
      What happened to one and all
      Trampling the growing tares,
      To lay down their mace and ball

      Fare thee well, my electronic friend
      I wish you no lasting sorrow
      And that you be made whole again
      That I may kick your ass on the morrow

      “Cry havoc and let slip the DOGE of war!”

      Those who cheered as J-6 American prisoners were locked in solitary for 18 months without trial, now suddenly fight tooth and nail for foreign terrorists’ "due process". — Buck Sexton

      HoraceH Aqua LetiferA 2 Replies Last reply
      • JollyJ Jolly

        An original 5-minute doggerel knock together...

        In an obscure corner of the net
        Resided the battling bastards
        Screeching, arguing, but yet
        Sometimes they quit flinging words

        Strangely, they really did care
        What happened to one and all
        Trampling the growing tares,
        To lay down their mace and ball

        Fare thee well, my electronic friend
        I wish you no lasting sorrow
        And that you be made whole again
        That I may kick your ass on the morrow

        HoraceH Offline
        HoraceH Offline
        Horace
        wrote on last edited by
        #55

        @Jolly said in The poetry thread:

        An original 5-minute doggerel knock together...

        In an obscure corner of the net
        Resided the battling bastards
        Screeching, arguing, but yet
        Sometimes they quit flinging words

        Strangely, they really did care
        What happened to one and all
        Trampling the growing tares,
        To lay down their mace and ball

        Fare thee well, my electronic friend
        I wish you no lasting sorrow
        And that you be made whole again
        That I may kick your ass on the morrow

        An ode to pwning libtards.

        Education is extremely important.

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        • JollyJ Jolly

          An original 5-minute doggerel knock together...

          In an obscure corner of the net
          Resided the battling bastards
          Screeching, arguing, but yet
          Sometimes they quit flinging words

          Strangely, they really did care
          What happened to one and all
          Trampling the growing tares,
          To lay down their mace and ball

          Fare thee well, my electronic friend
          I wish you no lasting sorrow
          And that you be made whole again
          That I may kick your ass on the morrow

          Aqua LetiferA Offline
          Aqua LetiferA Offline
          Aqua Letifer
          wrote on last edited by
          #56

          @Jolly said in The poetry thread:

          An original 5-minute doggerel knock together...

          In an obscure corner of the net
          Resided the battling bastards
          Screeching, arguing, but yet
          Sometimes they quit flinging words

          Strangely, they really did care
          What happened to one and all
          Trampling the growing tares,
          To lay down their mace and ball

          Fare thee well, my electronic friend
          I wish you no lasting sorrow
          And that you be made whole again
          That I may kick your ass on the morrow

          😄👏👏👏

          Nice one! Fun turn at the end there.

          Please love yourself.

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          • MikM Away
            MikM Away
            Mik
            wrote on last edited by
            #57

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            “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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            • Aqua LetiferA Offline
              Aqua LetiferA Offline
              Aqua Letifer
              wrote on last edited by
              #58

              Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

              So, on I went. I think I never saw
              Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
              For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
              But cockle, spurge, according to their law
              Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
              You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

              —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

              Please love yourself.

              Catseye3C RainmanR 2 Replies Last reply
              • Aqua LetiferA Aqua Letifer

                Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                So, on I went. I think I never saw
                Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                Catseye3C Offline
                Catseye3C Offline
                Catseye3
                wrote on last edited by Catseye3
                #59

                @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                I'm like, "Okay, that's pretty good; maybe a little labored . . .

                Oh wait, Browning??? I take it back, it's way good. Perfect. 🙂

                Success is measured by your discipline and inner peace. – Mike Ditka

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                • Catseye3C Catseye3

                  @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                  You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                  I'm like, "Okay, that's pretty good; maybe a little labored . . .

                  Oh wait, Browning??? I take it back, it's way good. Perfect. 🙂

                  Aqua LetiferA Offline
                  Aqua LetiferA Offline
                  Aqua Letifer
                  wrote on last edited by
                  #60

                  @Catseye3 said in The poetry thread:

                  @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                  You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                  I'm like, "Good one; maybe a little labored . . .

                  Oh wait, Browning??? I take it back, it's way good. Perfect. 🙂

                  I'd say this is probably his densest poem. So it's challenging, even for Browning. 😄

                  Please love yourself.

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                  • Aqua LetiferA Aqua Letifer

                    Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                    So, on I went. I think I never saw
                    Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                    For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                    But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                    Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                    You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                    —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                    RainmanR Offline
                    RainmanR Offline
                    Rainman
                    wrote on last edited by
                    #61

                    @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                    Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                    So, on I went. I think I never saw
                    Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                    For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                    But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                    Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                    You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                    —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                    So Aqua, what's wrong with me?
                    I read the same poem.
                    I read it again. And again.
                    And I think I kind of get a sense of what it's about.
                    But I'm probably wrong.
                    So, that's frustrating.
                    How is it that you love it, and I find it completely frustrating.
                    Not enjoyable.

                    Doctor PhibesD Aqua LetiferA 2 Replies Last reply
                    • RainmanR Rainman

                      @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                      Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                      So, on I went. I think I never saw
                      Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                      For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                      But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                      Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                      You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                      —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                      So Aqua, what's wrong with me?
                      I read the same poem.
                      I read it again. And again.
                      And I think I kind of get a sense of what it's about.
                      But I'm probably wrong.
                      So, that's frustrating.
                      How is it that you love it, and I find it completely frustrating.
                      Not enjoyable.

                      Doctor PhibesD Offline
                      Doctor PhibesD Offline
                      Doctor Phibes
                      wrote on last edited by
                      #62

                      Here I sit
                      Broken hearted
                      Spent a penny
                      And only farted

                      I was only joking

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                      • MikM Away
                        MikM Away
                        Mik
                        wrote on last edited by
                        #63

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                        “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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                        • RainmanR Rainman

                          @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                          Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                          So, on I went. I think I never saw
                          Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                          For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                          But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                          Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                          You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                          —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                          So Aqua, what's wrong with me?
                          I read the same poem.
                          I read it again. And again.
                          And I think I kind of get a sense of what it's about.
                          But I'm probably wrong.
                          So, that's frustrating.
                          How is it that you love it, and I find it completely frustrating.
                          Not enjoyable.

                          Aqua LetiferA Offline
                          Aqua LetiferA Offline
                          Aqua Letifer
                          wrote on last edited by
                          #64

                          @Rainman said in The poetry thread:

                          @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                          Traveling for the Easter holiday and for some weird and crazy reason, this poem got in my head instead of thoughts of spring flowers. 😄

                          So, on I went. I think I never saw
                          Such starv’d ignoble nature; nothing throve:
                          For flowers—as well expect a cedar grove!
                          But cockle, spurge, according to their law
                          Might propagate their kind, with none to awe,
                          You ’d think; a burr had been a treasure trove.

                          —Robert Browning, Childe Roland to the Dark Tower Came

                          So Aqua, what's wrong with me?
                          I read the same poem.
                          I read it again. And again.
                          And I think I kind of get a sense of what it's about.
                          But I'm probably wrong.
                          So, that's frustrating.
                          How is it that you love it, and I find it completely frustrating.
                          Not enjoyable.

                          There's nothing wrong with you.

                          1. Most people consume art for a distraction or entertainment. When those people come across work that isn't that, they don't like it. Could be that.
                          2. Poetry might not be your thing. Not everyone's into beekeeping, either. Totally fine.

                          Please love yourself.

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                          • MikM Away
                            MikM Away
                            Mik
                            wrote on last edited by
                            #65

                            Algebra. My mind refuses to entertain the notion.

                            “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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                            • MikM Mik

                              Algebra. My mind refuses to entertain the notion.

                              Aqua LetiferA Offline
                              Aqua LetiferA Offline
                              Aqua Letifer
                              wrote on last edited by
                              #66

                              @Mik said in The poetry thread:

                              Algebra. My mind refuses to entertain the notion.

                              Musicals.

                              Just. Not. My. Thing.

                              Please love yourself.

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                              • Aqua LetiferA Aqua Letifer

                                @Mik said in The poetry thread:

                                Algebra. My mind refuses to entertain the notion.

                                Musicals.

                                Just. Not. My. Thing.

                                MikM Away
                                MikM Away
                                Mik
                                wrote on last edited by
                                #67

                                @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                                @Mik said in The poetry thread:

                                Algebra. My mind refuses to entertain the notion.

                                Musicals.

                                Just. Not. My. Thing.

                                Silence! I keel you!

                                “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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                                • MikM Away
                                  MikM Away
                                  Mik
                                  wrote on last edited by
                                  #68

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                                  “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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                                    Aqua LetiferA Offline
                                    Aqua Letifer
                                    wrote on last edited by
                                    #69

                                    Excellent.

                                    Please love yourself.

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                                    • Doctor PhibesD Offline
                                      Doctor PhibesD Offline
                                      Doctor Phibes
                                      wrote on last edited by
                                      #70

                                      That reminds me vaguely of one of Spike Milligan's creations:

                                      Granny

                                      Through every nook and every cranny
                                      The wind blew in on poor old Granny
                                      Around her knees, into each ear
                                      (And up her nose as well, I fear)

                                      All through the night the wind grew worse
                                      It nearly made the vicar curse
                                      The top had fallen off the steeple
                                      Just missing him (and other people)

                                      It blew on man, it blew on beast
                                      It blew on nun, it blew on priest
                                      It blew the wig off Auntie Fanny-
                                      But most of all, it blew on Granny!

                                      I was only joking

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                                      • Aqua LetiferA Aqua Letifer

                                        Excellent.

                                        MikM Away
                                        MikM Away
                                        Mik
                                        wrote on last edited by
                                        #71

                                        @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                                        Excellent.

                                        I thought so too. It elevated itself above the subject matter.

                                        “I am fond of pigs. Dogs look up to us. Cats look down on us. Pigs treat us as equals.” ~Winston S. Churchill

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                                        • MikM Mik

                                          @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                                          Excellent.

                                          I thought so too. It elevated itself above the subject matter.

                                          Aqua LetiferA Offline
                                          Aqua LetiferA Offline
                                          Aqua Letifer
                                          wrote on last edited by
                                          #72

                                          @Mik said in The poetry thread:

                                          @Aqua-Letifer said in The poetry thread:

                                          Excellent.

                                          I thought so too. It elevated itself above the subject matter.

                                          Inside baseball:

                                          A most curious medley,
                                          A fart can be harmless,
                                          Or silent and deadly.

                                          You're writing a poem about farts—absolutely guaranteed you're going to mention SBDs. But it's not fun to just mention them, it's far more satisfying for the known cliché to complete a couplet. So what's the lead-in?

                                          This kind of initial setup and resolution is common in poetry—poems are rarely written linearly—but a lot of folks who dabble don't think to do it.

                                          This was written by someone who on some level knew what they were doing.

                                          (I'd have removed "strange" but that's me.)

                                          Please love yourself.

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